starofchina

                       

                                    擂台赛模式-击鼓传花

关键词:

1 Olympic Games  2  playground 3 waste paper   4  civilization

5 international freinds   6  Chinese culture

 

比赛规则与要求:

                      三个人一组,第一个人(第一个发帖的)写第一段,

第二个人(第二个发帖的)写第二段,

第三个人(依次类推)写第三段.

第四个人是下一轮的第一个…………

注：请发帖人注明自己的序号，即是写的第几段

 

 

 

  六个关键词任选一个,注意团队精神,前后呼应,承前启后

 

  质量要求,精益求精,每人40-50字,不许超过范围

 

  硬性要求:用准确的汉语表达出你写出英语的句子

 

    把八股文写活了,把英语玩转了 给我一个单词,我就能把地球人忽悠起来 

 

奖励: 无论写多少,只要没有严重的粗心大意似的错误,我会量质而评

 

 

  句子和结构可以参考这的:http://bbs.ebigear.com/thread-45948-1-1.html

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 10:32 编辑 ]

zy3048

Olympic Games 

Olympic Games will open in our country on August of eight, it is very important for us as it is a world games,we are going to knowledge Olympic Games's spirit and watch the wonderful games.We are proud of our country because we could hold the biggest games in the world and people could knowledge our culture!

 

八月八日将在我国召开奥运会,对我们来说是很重要的,因为它是一个世界性的运动,我们可以更好的了解奥林匹克运动会的精神和观看到精彩的节目．我们为我们的祖国感到骄傲，因为我们能够举行世界上最大的运动会和人们能够更多了解我们的文化！

Brucewang824719

     The first olympic games was  held in greece in 1896,and hold once every four years each time.But china hasn't participated in the first Olympic Games at that time,until the founding of new china . the chinese official was the first time participated in the 1984 Olympic Games held in Los Angeles.

 

修改：

Greece ，国家名应该大写

China，同上

Chinese，中国人也要大写

The Chinese official participated in the 1984 Olympic Games  for the first time held in Los Angeles.

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 08:33 编辑 ]

Brucewang824719

    内容重复 [ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 08:34 编辑 ]

pessimism

So, I will follow and be the second person of the team. and i choose"international friends"

 

The Chinese government had had spare no effort to apply to take apart in the Olympic Games, but there are too many obstacles in the way. But thanks to the friendly diplomacy policy, China made many international friends, and they are active on the way to participate the Olympics.

 

49 words,hehe..

 

 中文：中国政府不遗余力的想要参加奥运会，但在这过程中存在着很多阻碍。但由于中国奉行的是友好的外交政策，所以结交了不少国际朋友，而他们在中国进军奥运会的过程中发挥了极大的积极作用。

 

修改 为

spared no effort，过去完成时

改为However，避免重复

participate in 参加

 

 

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 08:52 编辑 ]

angelrong922

    China have very deep cluture that have five thousand years. there are more and more history in China, E.G. many graden in su zhou, ZHUOZHEN garden,SIYUAN , ....In bejing have gugong, grade wall.... this is long history.

     We should love ourself country,because she is nursing ours.

中国拥有很深的文化底蕴有五千年的历史.在中国有很多有历史的地方,如苏州的拙政园,西园,北京的故宫,长城等,他们都有很悠久的历史,

我们应该爱自己的国家,因为他们养育了我们.

修改：

has,单数

with，从句表述不对

There，开头大写第一个字母，再犯类似错误，扣分

把history改成古迹

是不是garden？如果是用复数

西园为什么是Si？

有什么地方用there be句型

请查一下故宫和长城的正确写法

all of them have a long history

our own

最后一句用词和结构都不对，查资料重新写

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 14:33 编辑 ]

wkhh

With the time passing by and the development of transport and economy ,more and more foreign people come to our country ,as well as Chinese go to other countries. So we have a chance to communicate with them.Sometimes we can make friends with them. I am eager to have a international friends.

 

修改

an

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 14:36 编辑 ]

wkhh

不好意思 发的时间一致了 没接起 ^_^ ^_^

wkhh

but with the time passing by and the development of economy,more and more people seem to neglect our deep culture. They just run after material possessions ,as well as fashion. They can't see the value of our deep culture. To face with this problem ,what we should do?

 

 

修改：

请记住，如果在我的版块里出现类似的错误，我会给你扣分的

 

 

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 14:38 编辑 ]

qmxlf

Thought I want to participate in the topic, the posts above make me confused. The 5th who said he will follow the 2nd is just talking another keyword, so should the three parts share one keyword or have three keywords of their own?

hedy2008

From protecting to propagandizing our traditions culture, we can do it by two ways. First is the government telling us that it is important to understand and protect our culture through all kind of the media? For example, we all know Eight Honors and Eight Disgraces. We should do it through daily activity. For instance, we should not waste paper. This is our frugality tradition culture.

从保护传统文化到宣传传统文化,我们可以从两方面来做.首先是政府需要指导人们了解和保护传统文化的重要性.举例来说,我们大家所熟悉的"八荣八耻".我们可以从一点一滴的日常小事做起.如我们不要浪费纸张.这就是一个节俭的传统文化.

 

修改

Firstly, the government should tell us

应该没有问的意思吧？

[ 本帖最后由 starofchina 于 2008-7-29 14:46 编辑 ]

盛夏

接力棒已经传到第几段了啊，有点看不出来了……

baobao77

作文用不着那么多段吧，英语四级一般也就三、四段啊

pessimism

Tanks you for collecting the mistakes in my article, I have learned much from it.

jamswang

i don't konw which one i should follow!it is in a mess.